This is the task following our class discussion about Writing Paragraph and also the discussion about your work submitted via email.
- Please write a revised short paragraph from your previous writing containing max 150 words
- Use the topic of the one/s that you have experienced with such as the one/s in the ADFELPS Writing Tests Task 1.
- Use COMMENT button to reply to this thread.
- You can subsequently publish your writing onto this thread and use ANONYMOUS user.
- Do not forget to put your name and class on the left top side of your writing.
- Your work should be submitted NLT (No Later Than) Monday, 23 June 2008 at 05.00 hours.
- you can find my presentation here: http://www.scribd.com/doc/3335923/Writing-Paragraph
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Joint Military Exercise of Indonesian Armed Force
Indonesian Armed Forces conducted joint military exercise in East Kalimantan and Riau Island from 7 June until 18 June 2008. In order to succeed this program not less than 3000 military personel of National Defence Force (TNI) joined this exercise. Each service showed their special ability by attacking the enemy that occupied Indonesian island. The purpose of this joint exercise is to control and to train the TNI leader elements by taking decision. Moreover, to improve and develop the Indonesian Armed Forces strengthen. All in all joint military exercise is to perform their existance to government and Indonesian people that TNI is always ready to defend and protect our nation.
Capt. Risa B4
Advantages of Early Childhood Training Center
Education is very important to our live for facing global competition. We will get
a job and earn a money, if we have a good education. The important thing that we have to prepare is starting from basic education. Early Childhood Training Center is one of education method for preparing our children to know about early childhood education. There are three advantages of Early Childhood Training Center.
The first advantage is our children can socialize with other children. In that stage they can communicate and make relationship among them. The second is we can know ability and weakness of our children as well as to improve and to dig their hidden skill. And the third, they can spend their time with useful things such as playing, singing, writing and drawing.
Finally, Early Childhood Training Center is very useful for our children not only to enrich and to improve their knowledge but also to prepare basic education for them.
Edwin Apria Candra
Captain
B.4
Traditional Transportation
Traditional transportation is a simple means that used to move people or things from one location to another in land and water. There are two kinds of traditional transportations that ever used in several years ago such as human-powered transport and animal-power transport.
Human-power transport is kinds of transportation that people must use their strong muscle to operate the means. This kind is usually used by rural societies that they still life behind. They only get a bit advantage because after finishing working they will feel tired and they need time to recover.
Animal-powered transport is kind of transportation that animal is used as power resources. This kind is usually used in mountain area, rural area, and most in desert area. There are many advantages of it such as minimize of human power, fuel, etc. People usually use it because they realize that animal is strong enough to do something as long as they healthy.
Traditional transportation is still reasonable used until now because it can be advantageous in rural area and also it doesn’t need a lot of money to operate.
Capt. Carles A Lumban Gaol
B-4
Football Team
Football is one of group sport that consists of eleven players. The goal is winning the match by printed goals as much as they can. Usually, besides eleven players there are five players as substitution players and led by a coach or a manager. Every one in a team has responsibility according their position to win the game. For example keepers is responsible to keep the goal net, back players are responsible to save and guard their area, mid players are responsible to arrange and manage the game and forward players are responsible to make scores and finally a coach or a manager is responsible to create the strategy for their team. All the players have to work in group as long as the match play on.
On the other hand, during the match running substitution players have to ready if the coach or the manager wants to change the strategy and he need to replace one or some players. Or maybe during the game, something happen that make a player had injured and he must be replaced by another players. Most of all, the important thing of playing football is all the man in the team have known the strategy of the coach and than apply it with work hard, support each other and have one vision to win the game.
Major Joshua Panggabean
Eka Marthasasri.T., S.H.
B4 Class
Badminton
Badminton is more popular than soccer in Indonesia. People like playing Badminton because it cheap and easy to play. Youth and adult, woman and man are play that sport, either indoor or outdoor. Playing that sport, we just need suttlecock and raqcuet. Badminton can play with single or double player. Indonesia has many talented Badminton players that had contributed medals or throphies to Indonesia, not only from local event, but also from international event. They are Alan Budikusuma, Susi Susanti, Taufik Hidayat, Ardi B. Wiranata, etc. The top achievements were when Alan and Susi won the gold medals at World Olympic in 1992. Moreover, Indonesian government is concern to create and to facilitate the young generation become a good badminton player. Government build a place in Cipayung, East Jakarta, center place for training young people who have talent in playing badminton. Cipayung provided with complete badminton’s equipment by the local government. Hopefully, with support from the Indonesian government, Badminton become the most popular sport in Indonesia.
The Importance of Maintaining Physical Condition
In Military
Physical condition is a condition of human being which is related to their endurance ability during their activity. Many people around the globe consider that it is very important to maintain their physical condition. There are several reasons why we always attempt to maintain our physical ability especially for military. However, all reasons have the same aim.
Soldiers frequently do some exercises for instance running, walking and hiking in order to keep and to increase their physical condition. In addition, they do all kinds of exercises because they want to prepare themselves to join with a military course that requires a good physical condition. And the main reason is they realize that it will support them during war operation.
Therefore, many soldiers believe that it is very important to maintain their physical condition.
Lt. Dodi
JDN SONDAKH
LTJG 15449/P
Small family
Having a small family has several advantages. The main advantage is they can live better. For example, if a parent has only two children, they can support both of them easily, therefore they can get a good education, good healthy care and they can get everything they need in their life. The next advantage is the children not only get a good financial but also good emotional .for example, their parents can give more attention about their education skills, behaviors and emotional needs. The parents will worry and confuse about their each child condition if they have many children. So the conclusion, a small family is more advantageous both from financially and emotionally side for the children.
Captain G . Bambang . H , ST
B – 4 Class
FAMILY PLANNING PROGRAM
Family planning program is very important in my country. Family planning program is the program to controlled population by limiting the value of baby birth. Now days, almost all of development countries have a big problem about population growth, especially in Indonesia. It has been increasing significantly since ten years a go. In other words, the Indonesian government must provide many jobs and also foods for their people. Base on that condition, it will impact not only our economic ability but also our national stability. So, that is why, the Indonesian government has decided to controlled their population by using family planning program. By the way, they have made a regulation about limited the value of baby birth, it is will success if the Indonesian people support them. According this rule, the government just allowed two births in each family who lives in Indonesia. All in all, the Indonesian government believes that program will success.
EDUCATION IN INDONESIA
Education is one of the most important things in Indonesia. It has great influence to the countries development in many aspects. It’s obviously shown that if most of the population in country can not read and write, there will be many problems occur in Indonesia.
Our government has tried to overcome this problem. One of the solutions is to set up the regulation that education is compulsory. Indonesian people must get a compulsory 9 years education program, then they can continue it by themselves. But some of them can’t continue because they still life in poor condition.
The government realizes that education is very necessary for the Indonesian people. They work hard to support the people in many ways, like curriculum, non pay school, free reference book and so on.
In conclusion, all the organizations need people who have knowledge and skillful abilities. These important things can be found in education. The advantages of education not only beneficial for individual himself, but also essential for the government. They can create many innovations in different fields such as, sciences, medicine, technology or agriculture. The government will become developing.
Suz Veronica.
Vending machine
Vending machine is a kind of machine that sells and provides food and drinks. It is usually located in public places, such as at the air port, at bus station and at train station in America. American people usually buy not only soft drinks like coca-cola and sprite, but also cigarettes and snacks. They just put the coin into slot and then they push the button to which food or drinks they want. For example, they want to buy a pack of cigarette and they just press the button that has picture a cigarette. After that the cigarette will come out automatically. If food or drinks had been sold out, there is worker who is responsible for filling food and drinks and taking the coins from that machine monthly. All in all, vending machine is very helpful for selling and providing food and drinks in public places. It is cheaper than another shop or drugstore in America.
Sgt. Suparmanto
B-4
1st Lt Eng Rahadian Firnandi_B4
Education is one of the national pilars in our country. It is absolutely important because it supports our national movement. We will achieve our goal if we have good education. How should we do? There are two ways to have good education. First, we should rearrange our education curriculum. For example, we should change our nine years compulsory education program to twelve years. After finishing twelve years program, hopefully the students will have more capable than previous. In addition, we should build our children’s character early by encouraging them to read. By reading they will have a lot of knowledge.
Maj.Masnal Samian, SH
B4 Class
The most popular sport in Indonesia is Football. It is played by many people from children until middle-age men or women with eleven players; those are keeper, left-back centre-back, right-back, four middle players, and three strikers. Every team has a coach who has responsible for managing and training a team becomes a winner. It can happen, if each player has good physically’, skillful, mentally and as team work. Furthermore, they have to train their skill, physic continuously and seriously in order to be a good player. Moreover, the most important thing is how to combine their skill in team as good team-work and to win the game. In summary, the most popular sport in Indonesia is Football. It consists of eleven players and played as team.
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