B2 Writing Paragraph (Revised)

Dear All,

We have been doing serious discussion about this topic. Our comrades from other class also been very kind commenting on our works.
Your next happy hour is revising your previous writing as have been advised.
Please make sure that you follow the steps; drafting, writing, proofreading, correcting, re-writing, finalizing, submitting respectively.
This should be your final piece of work, therefore it had better if you could execute this tasks responsibly.

Thank you for your cooperation.

Cheers,